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GreyRose, I am humbled that you would go to the effort of rewriting a chapter based on my review. Without actually changing too much about the events, the changes you did make kept the ending consistent with the world-concepts that the story is built on. Specifically that girls can be tricked into &...

GreyRose. Another good story, thank you. Some comments. First, the foreshadowing of the professor winding up knowing about things all along did work, and the ending was not particularly a surprise, but it was good. The actual sex scenes that you wrote were well paced, hot and fit both the characters...

GreyRose, Thank you for responding, and for taking the comments in the spirit in which they were offered. That my comments might possibly aid your writing in the future is about the best compliment that a critic can get, thank you. I am currently reading your Lake Party Slave Game story on this site...

Spoilers ahead, but if you're reading the comments below the 5th and final chapter of a story ahead of reading the story, that's on you, not me. GreyRose, Thank you for a wonderful story. "The girl can't help it." is one of my very favorite story themes and this one hit that particular nai...