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Nice story, it has good pacing and good flow on how events developed. The snap shot of both the judge and the guard's internal dialog gave depth to things.

Though I think you missed a dark jest, when the guard said they had a lawyer there. I immediately thought that a female lawyer from out of the ...

Fearful Future by Joe Doe / Part 12 by GreyRose
When I started this chapter, I had planned on 0717 being on the road again as the break point, but there just seemed so much happening that she still has an appointment to keep in the next chapter before she leaves this facility.

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This part was harder to wrap my head around than I thought, there was a lot more to tell than I had planned on. Giving a different feel to this processing center than what we've become familiar with through Big D and HCI was an interesting challenge.

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Joe, a great addition to this story! I love the skilled young artist's rendering, and how that will have its own immortality.

I bet Slave Mart will have that in their advertising promotions for some time to come!

Interesting ideas Eug, thanks for sharing. But I've got a different story arc in mind.

Now to see if the characters agree to where I'm aiming the story. ;)

I've had stories where the characters highjack the plot and it ends up someplace completely different from where I meant to arrive when I ...

I think I like what you came up with for the brand better than what I had in mind. I had chosen the Pacifico font, SPS - with the two 'S' characters pushed together, and the 'P' planted like a flag above them.

I don't have any experience in graphic design and searching for images is a black hole ...

Re: Fearful Future by Joe Doe
Part 9 by GreyRose

Whew! I wrote the first few parts in a kind of fever. Then I needed some extra time to recharge and think how things were going at this new slave processing center. I also had a side bar with Joe that was very productive, as they tend to be, and ...

An idea that, is about after the parade. ;)

The Slave Mart group seems to be terribly disorganized in dealing with the parade. What if the 2nd truck bundles up all of the loose Slave Mart gear (including the anvil and the associated tools) and heads back to the store. :o

This would be a problem ...

I realized after I posted that the parade had already started, so my ideal was too late.

I also realize that since the two girls from Fox5 news didn't make the official story-line, this extra bit wasn't likely to happen either. It was just an interesting fantasy idea.

As I was reading my way through this story again, I had a wild thought.

When Julia arrived at the parade start, there was great excitement and everyone watched avidly as she was stripped and then was collared.

Swiftly following that excitement is the arrival of the Fox5 news team, and the stations ...

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Look under part 5, Joe's reply to that is the part 6. It's not numbered, but the numbering worked out so that I've been designating his reply's as the even number sections.

Re: Fearful Future by Joe Doe
Part 7 by GreyRose
For those paying attention to the chapter numbering, part 6 is by Joe and is under the part I posted on Sunday.

I just realized that when I posted the first addition to Joe’s story, I thought it was going to be 2 maybe three chapters. This is chapter ...

Once again a great job! The escalation was beautifully done, and the teasing the visiting friends with hints was beautiful to read. I can imaging them every time they think of this weekend trip that bit of mystery, pops up and nags at them.

I had a thought of something that could complicate the number issue, in addition to miss matched lists. The original 23 had their number put on their shoulder/tit, and then that young fellow came along with that sunscreen that he slathered all of the slaves with, focusing on making sure that their ...

Awesome story, beautifully done. I love the escalation as she ramps up her act.

Looking forward to the conclusion of this one!

Once again Joe you deliver. In reading your part it has added depth and flavor to what I'm working up next. And like you I'm repeatedly checking to see if you've posted something awesome in response.

This next part is a going a bit slower as I'm not as familiar with Illinois as I used to be, but I ...

Not sure of the proper etiquette, but I’m posting the next part under my story group.

And commenting here for future reference, to help readers find the next part of the story.

Fearful Future by Joe Doe
Part 5 by GreyRose

The original several chapters of Fearful Future can be found under Joe Doe’s stories, a couple of the chapters are under the original story’s string.

Not sure of the proper etiquette, but I’m posting this under my story group. And commenting where the ...

Fantastic Joe!

I had the next part written, but this is so great, it's part of the official story-line. 8-)

I'll rework what I've got to include this, as you've given me a great idea that fits in with a plot point I was working in. This change will make that feel more organic (orgasmic? :lol ...

Fearful Future by Joe Doe
Part 3 by GreyRose

It's been a long time since I last posted anything on this site, I lost my focus on writing but recently I’ve begun working on getting things back on track and finishing the two story-lines I left hanging.

As a way to say I’m back, and sorry for the ...

My compliments on an excellent chapter with very interesting developments, I'm looking forward to the continuation of your story.

I like your inclusion of the FINO, introduced by Carl Bradford, and your introducing of an additional clause that can add interesting elements as well. The chapter I'm ...

Great new chapter! As always great character development with so many directions you might take things.

I'm suspecting that Stefania is following her own plan for training Frankie, and may prove to have been more supportive of our heroine than it appears. And I'm thinking that Amy better watch her ...

Hmm... I like the idea of adding the ID cards to this environment.

Chips could be only for those that have been enslaved or have gone the extra distance to get them. Being a unique device there would be limited distribution of the chip readers, after all why spend money for something that would not ...

Amber, aka Splits - Redhead, 5'4" https://stripsearchfantasy.com/gallery/picture.php?/922/category/70

Juliana DeVries - Raven haired, 5’ 7”
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Josua (Josh) Bronson - aka Bucking Bronson

Jake Abercrombie - the old man downstairs ...

Great chapter! I liked how you handled her transition from getting slave graded to slave traded. And brining in the other girl from the lobby was a nice touch. You give entertaining details and your characters feel real. Looking forward to the sale and where this one goes from there.