Katie gets an Education – Post graduate studies...
Part 5
by GreyRose
Katie scurries behind her new owner, a lecherous old man that just yesterday she would have gone out of her way not to see. Every time she visited his office on campus his office was cramped and smelly and he tried to grope her at every chance he could make. But now he has complete control over her body and her ability to speak. Now she is his property, his slave.
They didn't make it far before Katie recognized someone that just might help her! Katie waves frantically at Wynter, hoping that since she was the one that sent the Katie to the pet store there must be something she can do to get her out of this mess.
John catches what she's doing out of the corner of his eye, “Bad girl! Slaves are not to draw attention to themselves. I need to do something with your hands so you don't do that again.” He grabs Katie and spins her about and twists her hands so they are back to back. He does something and she hears two distinct clicks and he lets her hands go. She yanks on them hard but they stay locked behind her.
“What have we here? Sir, why would your slave wave at me?” Katie hears Wynter talking to her master. Her hopes crash to her feet, didn't Wynter recognize her?
“Hrumph. She's a new slave and has not yet learned proper decorum for her status.” John replies. Taking Katie's arm he turns her about so they both face the Sorority girl.
As Wynter takes a long look at Katie, humming appreciatively, at least until she finally gets to the slave girls face. “Wha... Katie is that you?” At Katie's slight nod she continues, “Well I see that you aren't Sorority material after all! I guess you got a taste of wearing a slave collar and just couldn't give it up!” She laughs at Katie.
Looking between the two girls, “So you two know each other? May I know how?” the old man shifts so he stands equally close to both of them.
“Well I'm disappointed to say that this slut tried to join my Sorority. She and a couple of others were given their final test yesterday and it looks like she failed completely. I wonder if the others did as badly?” Wynter shakes her head as Katie gives the other girl an evaluating look.
Before when they had met the Sorority girl was always wearing a dress suit that showed very little of her shape. Today she was wearing a skin tight knit dress, it is hot pink and comes about half-way down her shapely thighs. Katie is impressed with how hot the other girl looks.
John is also taking notice of the sexy young woman, noticing that she is somewhat drunk and not paying enough attention to things around her. “Why don't you ask Katie if she enjoys her new status? How about it Katie, do you enjoy being my slave?”
Knowing that she dare not be silent, it hits Katie that she has to agree to anything that she is asked. Anything at all, no matter how humiliating it might be. Anyone listening will hear her willingly go along with whatever degrading things her owner chooses for her.
Having one more link to her old self image shattered, she gives the only answer she can. “Yes Master.”
The other girl snickers, “And here I thought you might be one of us and was going to invite you to join the Sorority!” Reaching out she gives Katie's left tit a quick grope before raising her hand to stroke at the girls new slave collar. “My this is an impressive one. Does it have many features?”
John watches closely seeing how the other girl reacts to touching Katie's collar. “Oh yes, it has all the bells and whistles. I can set her an electronic leash, so that she has to stay within a set area or be punished. I can track her anywhere on the planet as long as she stays within range of mobile phone cell towers, and if she goes outside their range the collar will punish her until she returns.”
As he speaks he can see how her breath quickens as she continues to stroke Katie's collar, “You know, since you said you were going to invite her into your sorority, why don't you join hers?” He reaches out quickly and grabs the Sorority girls arm and drags her back to the pet store booth.
Her intoxicated mind struggles to grasp what is going on and she sputters incoherently as they approach the booth. Katie follows having finally gotten the idea of how to walk with the dammed hobble. She realizes that she has to take very quick tiny steps, which makes her large tits bob merrily to the amusement of anyone watching.
“John, back again so soon?” Ricky laughs.
“Yes boy, I found the first payment for you.” Mr Chambers replies as he pushes the pink clad girl forward. “I think she's Prime grade, so how about we consider us even?”
Ricky pauses a moment as he looks over the drunk co-ed under discussion. “Now John, the deal was you bring me 12 girls and your slave is paid for. Nothing specified grades. But to keep you from bringing me bottom of the barrel cunts....” The store manager pauses in thought.
“Wait!” Screeches the pinned girl. “You can't enslave me! My father mph grph...” The girls tirade is cut short as John slaps his hand over her mouth. “Rick, how about you... yes just as I was saying.” He laughs as Rick is snapping a store slave collar on the girl even as he was starting to suggest it.
Continuing from where he left off, “Tell you what John, even though the quality of the one's you bring in wasn't mentioned, I don't want you to just bring in any cunt you come across. I'll grant you that this one counts as at least two and if she is graded as a Prime we'll talk about her final trade value.”
Shaking his head with a sigh John answers, “All right. I guess you did learn something from your time here at campus.” Then he chuckles.
They pull the girl behind the table and strip off her pink dress. Doing so reveals two very nice tits, a tiny see-through thong and a thigh garter. It holds her cell phone, and a thin wallet. They dismantle her phone and look through her wallet, finding all the information they need to complete her slave paperwork.
Laughing and joking the two men fill out Wynter's slave registration and Katie looks on and realizes that she is feeling... satisfaction. She is feeling glad that the girl that got her here has had the same fate befall her. She sees Ricky program the brander and then hands it to John. This time Katie watches as another girl is branded. She sees the new slave arch her back and her mouth opens wide in a silent scream, but the two men hold her still until they are done.
Something to her left catches Katie's attention and looks over to see that Kaitlyn has replaced her on the same stand she was on. As Barney finishes getting her set up, the Frat boys from earlier show up. While they are disappointed that Katie has been sold, they quickly take an interest in Kaitlyn.
As Barnie has not yet branded her, he turns this into a demonstration that quickly gathers a crowd to watch. Taken with inspiration, he hands the brander to the leader of the four. Barnie talks him through locating the correct spot and how long it needs to be held for a permanent mark. The whole time Kaitlyn is watching the brander. Mesmerized by the tool as it moves from hand to hand, knowing what it will mean to her when it is used. Katie is equally focused on the brander, eager to see another girl branded.
After what seemed an eternity to the two girls, the fellow steps up and presses the brander against Kaitlyn's hip. The crowd cheers and applauds, the branded girl gives a silent scream and wilts as the brander is pulled away. Katie feels her pussy spasm in response.
Then the Frat leader starts trying to argue Kaitlyn's price down, Barney counters by showing the four of them what a meat grader looks for and how that determines the slaves price. Since showing them how to use a brander drew a crowd, he then has the four go through each step of the grading process on Kaitlyn.
John is quickly drawn in by the spectacle of four fit young men each running their hands over the helpless slave. While one is checking the firmness and nipple responsiveness of her tits, another is probing her pussy for juiciness and the tightness of its passage. Kaitlyn is torn between her arousal at their probing hands and the horror of being publicly 'graded' in front of the crowd!
As Kaitlyn spirals higher and higher from their rough attention, John's fingers invade Katie's pussy. She gasps as the intruding digits slide effortlessly into her sopping channel. Her body flexes her legs wide to ease this assault and Katie's passions quickly reach their previous levels. His casual disregard for her body, how his fingers rape her as she stands there just add to the humiliation and that just raises the fire in her pussy!
The two girls quickly spiral and cum hard. Kaitlyn's is a silent scream, where Katie gives vent to a soul searing moan that shocks the entire crowd into silence. Katie's body convulses on her masters fingers as the crowd stares at her. It is only his fingers in her pussy along with his arm that she has collapsed onto, that keeps her from falling to the ground. The crowd that had cheered Kaitlyn's branding go wild for Katie's release. Katie drifts in the post-orgasm glow, part in denial – part drinking in the attention.
Once her eyes can focus again, her master elbows her off his arm and back onto her own feet. “Quite an impressive display slut! I look forward to you earning such in the future. I also look forward to punishing you for having this one without permission.” He holds his fingers, sticky with her juices, “Now clean my hand!”
She can feel herself blush yet again as she is forced to suck and lick his fingers clean. Many in the crowd still are watching her as she does this.
Katie wants to hang her head in shame, but the damned collar will not let her drop her chin for long. So she is forced to keep her head up as if proud of being so rawly sexual before the crowd.
As she turns away from what is happening to Kaitlyn and the crowd, she sees a boy standing at the table. Where the men from the Fraternity are tall, athletic and well dressed, this fellow is their opposite. He is about Kaitlyn's height, overweight and a really bad dresser.
Katie blinks, remembering someone just like him at her High School. That kid had been a total loser that she had embarrassed in front of the whole school when he tried to ask her out.
“Hey Mister,” this kid calls out to Ricky. “That slut over on the stand, is she still for sale?” Pointing over at Kaitlyn, still surrounded by the guys from the Fraternity.
“Sure thing son, I think those fellas over there are interested in her but no money has changed hands.” Ricky answers.
“I'll pay whatever you are asking,” the kid jumps forward, pulling out his wallet.
“Now son she's kinda expensive, you got enough money for her? Maybe you want one of the cheaper sluts I've got back here?” Ricky answers waving at the slaves in the coffle at the back of the booth.
“Money's no problem, my parents are loaded. You see, that bitch over there... I know her. She... she owes me big time! I have to own her and make her pay!” The kid is almost jumping up and down as he says this.
With a chuckle, “Now don't hurt yourself son. If you've got the money then you've just bought yourself a slave.”
“Good!” The kid nods emphatically, “Put the name of Stanley Tubbley down as her new owner!” The two move on to filling out the bill of sale. As they do this Stanley watches Kaitlyn as she stares up at all the tall, handsome jocks that she thinks will be her new owners. Katie guesses he is looking forward to surprising her with the news that HE is her new owner. She doubts that excited is what Kaitlyn will be feeling from the news!
John casually slaps Katie's face, “Come along slut! You don't want to earn another punishment for making me wait, do you?” He turns away not waiting for or expecting an answer from his slave.
As he walks away through the crowd, he says over his shoulder, “That face of yours needs to show the real inner slut that you are. I've heard that there are permanent make-ups that will be just perfect for you. Of course they are expensive, so in order to afford it I'll need to whore you out to pay for it. As I recall there are a number of teachers and probably students that would pay me to get a piece of that juicy twat you got between your legs!” Katie's horror at this suggestion is only matched by the heat ignited in her crotch!
The crowd swallows them as Katie scurries after her master, dreading what he plans for her as much as she dreams of doing every nasty thing he plans for her!
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End of Story
Katie gets an Education – Post graduate studies... Part 5
Katie gets an Education – Post graduate studies... Part 5
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Review, Thoughts ..... Spoilers
Spoilers ahead, but if you're reading the comments below the 5th and final chapter of a story ahead of reading the story, that's on you, not me.
GreyRose, Thank you for a wonderful story. "The girl can't help it." is one of my very favorite story themes and this one hit that particular nail on the head. Another of my favorite aspects of a story, especially with a reluctance/humiliation theme, is to actually see and believe the thoughts in the girl's head as she plummets to her eventual fate. In this case, her internal struggles are real enough, and the curve ball with the fantasy at the Pet Shop when the boys from the bus walk in was just what the story needed at that point and it really shows, rather than tells, what is going on inside Katie's mind.
This is a review, and a critique; however, nothing that I tell you that I would have preferred should be taken to mean that I think you were wrong for going another direction. Even if something was not my preference, I assume that you wrote this story for yourself, and that in sharing it, you simply hope that others will enjoy it.
The premise is very very good. Female slavery exists, it started in some country in Africa and has spread. It is also fairly new to this country. That's all the exposition that it needs. This is a porn story, and while I expect that you may know a lot more about how female slavery came to be in this world, if the story doesn't need it, it was the right decision to leave it out. It also makes sense that, given how new it is, the rules regarding enslavement are still somewhat ill-defined, so that trickery and subterfuge are the order of the day when it comes to getting free women to "voluntarily" accept slavery, and that women are still relatively un-cautious. This is brought home clearly when the guy running the booth at the college tells the manager from the Pet Shop to just wait and see what happens as the event goes on. 10 points to Slytherin for world-consistency for the first 95% of the tale.
The idea that you can silence a woman with a collar was clearly a plot device to cover up a plot hole, given that, if they could talk, they could explain what was going on and presumably get out, or get exposed to a harsh reality. Putting them on "mute" both worked with the story and allowed the girls to get further into their humiliation without having to have some authority figure tell them that "they fucked up" before their fates were actually decided. This allowed you to let the protagonist avoid becoming resigned to her fate until it was too late. The device also makes sharing the protagonist's thoughts more compelling, because she can not speak. It carries through to the later stages of the story where all she can actually say is "yes Master" and have her not only hate that she is saying it, but also completely excited by the fact that she has to.
Other things I liked:
The slave display stand at the University booth was brilliant. I'm likely to steal that idea at some point.
Katie's clear excitement, and also reluctance, throughout the entire story. This, combined with the humiliation which is the driving force behind her reluctance, is the central conflict of the story, and you carry it all of the way to the end without it becoming strained or unbelievable.
The things I didn't like:
The assistant manager at the Pet Shop just got dropped. We got all the signals that she was a main character, but then she goes to lunch and is never hear from again. Kudos for at least explaining why, within the context of the story, but she probably should have been seen again at the University booth, even if only to let Katie get her hopes up, and have them dashed when she leaves.
The ending. Up until the last scene, the world was built on enslaving girls through trickery and subterfuge, but the final scene where the sorority president just gets grabbed and dragged to the slave booth simply amounts to kidnapping. To me, that undercuts the entire story. If kidnapping was viable, then the girls would have just been grabbed, stripped and enslaved the moment that they went into the back room at the Pet Shop. I understand the desire to show the deal that was made in exchange for Katie, but, the encounter with the sorority president could certainly have gone some other way. 5 points from Slytherin for losing world-consistency at the end.
Also on the ending. The root conflict in the story is internal to Katie. She is terribly excited by submission and humiliation, but she definitely does not want to spend the rest of her life as a slave. At the end, the conflict still exists. Her new Master is what he is, and she is not attracted to, nor overtly excited by him. He is simply the situation she finds herself dealing with. Katie is fundamentally still the same person that she was at the beginning of the story, conflicted, excited, but not accepting of who she is. Her situation has changed, but she has not. An alternative, which I thought was coming, when she had a mind-melting orgasm on her Master's fingers in the University booth, could have led her to a real acceptance of her place and a genuine embrace of submission to her new Master. Another alternative would have been what you had potentially foreshadowed, some hunk, perhaps someone she knew, buying her out from under the academic advisor, or the advisor using her for a while and then selling her on to the hunky professor that she could have had a crush on. I understand that you may not have been going for the "happy" ending, but either of the latter would have resolved Katie's internal conflict and, IMO, been a better way for Katie to have come to terms with who she was.
This was a well written story, that carried the tension almost to the end. While I had trouble with the way that the story was ended, it was still exciting and interesting all of the way through. Thank you very much for sharing.
Yvel
GreyRose, Thank you for a wonderful story. "The girl can't help it." is one of my very favorite story themes and this one hit that particular nail on the head. Another of my favorite aspects of a story, especially with a reluctance/humiliation theme, is to actually see and believe the thoughts in the girl's head as she plummets to her eventual fate. In this case, her internal struggles are real enough, and the curve ball with the fantasy at the Pet Shop when the boys from the bus walk in was just what the story needed at that point and it really shows, rather than tells, what is going on inside Katie's mind.
This is a review, and a critique; however, nothing that I tell you that I would have preferred should be taken to mean that I think you were wrong for going another direction. Even if something was not my preference, I assume that you wrote this story for yourself, and that in sharing it, you simply hope that others will enjoy it.
The premise is very very good. Female slavery exists, it started in some country in Africa and has spread. It is also fairly new to this country. That's all the exposition that it needs. This is a porn story, and while I expect that you may know a lot more about how female slavery came to be in this world, if the story doesn't need it, it was the right decision to leave it out. It also makes sense that, given how new it is, the rules regarding enslavement are still somewhat ill-defined, so that trickery and subterfuge are the order of the day when it comes to getting free women to "voluntarily" accept slavery, and that women are still relatively un-cautious. This is brought home clearly when the guy running the booth at the college tells the manager from the Pet Shop to just wait and see what happens as the event goes on. 10 points to Slytherin for world-consistency for the first 95% of the tale.
The idea that you can silence a woman with a collar was clearly a plot device to cover up a plot hole, given that, if they could talk, they could explain what was going on and presumably get out, or get exposed to a harsh reality. Putting them on "mute" both worked with the story and allowed the girls to get further into their humiliation without having to have some authority figure tell them that "they fucked up" before their fates were actually decided. This allowed you to let the protagonist avoid becoming resigned to her fate until it was too late. The device also makes sharing the protagonist's thoughts more compelling, because she can not speak. It carries through to the later stages of the story where all she can actually say is "yes Master" and have her not only hate that she is saying it, but also completely excited by the fact that she has to.
Other things I liked:
The slave display stand at the University booth was brilliant. I'm likely to steal that idea at some point.
Katie's clear excitement, and also reluctance, throughout the entire story. This, combined with the humiliation which is the driving force behind her reluctance, is the central conflict of the story, and you carry it all of the way to the end without it becoming strained or unbelievable.
The things I didn't like:
The assistant manager at the Pet Shop just got dropped. We got all the signals that she was a main character, but then she goes to lunch and is never hear from again. Kudos for at least explaining why, within the context of the story, but she probably should have been seen again at the University booth, even if only to let Katie get her hopes up, and have them dashed when she leaves.
The ending. Up until the last scene, the world was built on enslaving girls through trickery and subterfuge, but the final scene where the sorority president just gets grabbed and dragged to the slave booth simply amounts to kidnapping. To me, that undercuts the entire story. If kidnapping was viable, then the girls would have just been grabbed, stripped and enslaved the moment that they went into the back room at the Pet Shop. I understand the desire to show the deal that was made in exchange for Katie, but, the encounter with the sorority president could certainly have gone some other way. 5 points from Slytherin for losing world-consistency at the end.
Also on the ending. The root conflict in the story is internal to Katie. She is terribly excited by submission and humiliation, but she definitely does not want to spend the rest of her life as a slave. At the end, the conflict still exists. Her new Master is what he is, and she is not attracted to, nor overtly excited by him. He is simply the situation she finds herself dealing with. Katie is fundamentally still the same person that she was at the beginning of the story, conflicted, excited, but not accepting of who she is. Her situation has changed, but she has not. An alternative, which I thought was coming, when she had a mind-melting orgasm on her Master's fingers in the University booth, could have led her to a real acceptance of her place and a genuine embrace of submission to her new Master. Another alternative would have been what you had potentially foreshadowed, some hunk, perhaps someone she knew, buying her out from under the academic advisor, or the advisor using her for a while and then selling her on to the hunky professor that she could have had a crush on. I understand that you may not have been going for the "happy" ending, but either of the latter would have resolved Katie's internal conflict and, IMO, been a better way for Katie to have come to terms with who she was.
This was a well written story, that carried the tension almost to the end. While I had trouble with the way that the story was ended, it was still exciting and interesting all of the way through. Thank you very much for sharing.
Yvel
Re: Katie gets an Education – Post graduate studies... Part 5
Yvel,
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I don't know if you've read any of the 'Tracey' stories by Katie Smith, this is an extension of her original slave world. From your comments I gave enough background for the reader to understand the rules of engagement for the plot but didn't bog it down with unnecessary commentary.
I want to thank you for your comments on what you enjoyed and worked and what didn't. You pointed out some valid plot holes that I had not realized were there. I try very hard to have consistency in my stories and I had not realized I had broken my own established rules. I'll need to keep these points in mind for future stories.
I also see your point about the shop girl, I had planned for her to be more involved but lost her in weaving in other elements. Another item for me to be more careful about in future stories.
I greatly appreciate well thought out comments on my stories as they are the best way for me to learn what readers get from my efforts and items I need to improve on. I hope my "Lake Party Slave Game" is one you enjoy as well. (I have a Deviant Art page that has other stories I've written, some of which I don't believe fits the format of this group. If anyone is interested they can look for GrymtheGray there and check them out.)
And I hope we see a story from you in the near future. (If you see any elements you like in any of my works, feel free to use them in your stories.)
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. I don't know if you've read any of the 'Tracey' stories by Katie Smith, this is an extension of her original slave world. From your comments I gave enough background for the reader to understand the rules of engagement for the plot but didn't bog it down with unnecessary commentary.
I want to thank you for your comments on what you enjoyed and worked and what didn't. You pointed out some valid plot holes that I had not realized were there. I try very hard to have consistency in my stories and I had not realized I had broken my own established rules. I'll need to keep these points in mind for future stories.
I also see your point about the shop girl, I had planned for her to be more involved but lost her in weaving in other elements. Another item for me to be more careful about in future stories.
I greatly appreciate well thought out comments on my stories as they are the best way for me to learn what readers get from my efforts and items I need to improve on. I hope my "Lake Party Slave Game" is one you enjoy as well. (I have a Deviant Art page that has other stories I've written, some of which I don't believe fits the format of this group. If anyone is interested they can look for GrymtheGray there and check them out.)
And I hope we see a story from you in the near future. (If you see any elements you like in any of my works, feel free to use them in your stories.)
Re: Katie gets an Education – Post graduate studies... Part 5
GreyRose,
Thank you for responding, and for taking the comments in the spirit in which they were offered. That my comments might possibly aid your writing in the future is about the best compliment that a critic can get, thank you. I am currently reading your Lake Party Slave Game story on this site and I am enjoying it so far. I will also check out the other materials that you referenced.
As for my stories, I start a lot more than I finish. I like "story" a lot more than I like writing, so once I have the story worked out in my head, it tends to not go any further on paper. In other words, don't hold your breath. What writing I do complete is usually in RP with my significant other.
Cheers,
Yvel
Thank you for responding, and for taking the comments in the spirit in which they were offered. That my comments might possibly aid your writing in the future is about the best compliment that a critic can get, thank you. I am currently reading your Lake Party Slave Game story on this site and I am enjoying it so far. I will also check out the other materials that you referenced.
As for my stories, I start a lot more than I finish. I like "story" a lot more than I like writing, so once I have the story worked out in my head, it tends to not go any further on paper. In other words, don't hold your breath. What writing I do complete is usually in RP with my significant other.
Cheers,
Yvel