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Re: Marie's Slavery Adventures Pt. 4

Posted: Wed Dec 09, 2020 8:47 pm
by Survivor29
I hope no one minds me sharing more random thoughts while we wait.

Recently saw a few videos and things with "fitness" styles or settings such as this: https://www.pornhub.com/view_video.php? ... 682103cda4

Kind of gave me a random idea for what might happen in a modern slavery setting where even free females are 2nd or 3rd class citizens. I think it's interesting to ask "how might a man take advantage of this setting?" in all sorts of situations.

For example, how might a gym personal trainer guy take advantage of such a society where females can be enslaved? Where free females are generally meek and submissive? Where males are seen as in charge by default? Where society overlooks, ignores, or even encourages unfair treatment of females?

Let's say John was a normal guy working as a personal trainer in a country where a Female Slavery Act was passed and society had progressed this way. He pressures/forces sexy slave age females to join the gym and purchase expensive subscriptions, premiums, personal training, merchandise, etc. Sometimes he pulls in window shoppers or pulls in girls off the street, the girls being very meek and submissive themselves while simultaneously nobody is bothering by a bit of manhandling and groping. Playful pinches and spanks, guiding hands on bottoms, etc.

Sometimes the gym lures girls in by sending them coupons for “fitness assessments” with the personal trainer which of course is just an excuse to get attractive girls in the gym and stripped to examine their bodies.

Regardless of how the girls are brought into the gym, they are invariably stripped of their street clothes to enjoy their free "fitness assessment". Their clothes disposed of and their personal effects taken by John for "safe keeping", the girls find themselves in a very vulnerable position sitting naked in John's office in the gym. He signs them up for expensive memberships with premium joining fees and all the extras like "personal training" and "deep muscle massages".

The papers are put in front of the girls to sign and most will sign it without delay just out of instinctive submissiveness or a desire to get it over with, in any event John has already got the girls’ bank cards out of their purses and processed the payments regardless of whether the naked girls have signed or not. Since they are already signed up for an expensive gym for a minimum of 12 months and with an expensive cancellation fee, the girls usually do end up using the gym to workout.

The girls end up stuck with expensive gym memberships, and on top of that pay John expensive premiums to take advantage of them physically under the guise of "personal training", "deep muscle massage", and the like.

That's the end of my idea. Maybe it has nothing to do with slavery, but I feel like in a modern slavery society there would still be free females and they would face difficulties in life beyond the constant threat of slavery. Slavery must have some conditions, and life must have some kind of pressure that sometimes makes a girl ask herself, "Maybe it would be easier if I just gave up and became a slave?"

Re: Marie's Slavery Adventures Pt. 4

Posted: Wed Dec 09, 2020 10:30 pm
by katamaran789
I apologize for the delay, I've been super busy and only had the occasional sunday for myself the last couple of weeks so progress is very slow, and it will propably stay this way for the foreseeable future. :(

Re: Marie's Slavery Adventures Pt. 4

Posted: Tue Dec 22, 2020 4:12 am
by orflash64
What's happening with Marie?

Re: Marie's Slavery Adventures Pt. 4

Posted: Thu Feb 25, 2021 12:33 am
by Survivor29
Bit of a random tangent (it's so quiet around here anyway), but the discussion post-story in this thread was really good I think and I think these forums would benefit from more story adjacent discussions.

Writing actual stories is difficult, as I am sure any writer can attest, and which all good fans are grateful for, but I think it helps both support stories and interest to keep things more lively and active.

I know I am not sharing anything genius, but yeah, I don't know. Something, anything, would be good!

Whether sharing pictures of what we think characters look like or pictures that we hope can inspire pictures. Sharing our likes/dislike and discussing story ideas.

Re: Marie's Slavery Adventures Pt. 4

Posted: Fri Jan 13, 2023 6:55 am
by Tanuki
I'm really enjoying your story. One suggestion is about the meeting Frau Albrecht has with the slave lobbyist. Since this is such a critical plot point, I think it needs to be more believable. It doesn't quite make sense that she would need to bring a slave - it isn't legal in Germany so I see no reason she would need to please the lobbyists (unless of course she has an ulterior motive.)

Another comment is about the reference images. I wouldn't overdue it, because this is prose after all, and some readers may want to imagine what a dress looks like, or what a character looks like, rather than see an image. I find it very helpful when describing a BDSM device for example, but not necessarily needed other times. Having said that I enjoyed the images since I'm not used to that.

I love how Marie is slowly warming up to the slavery idea. I'd like to see more internal thoughts, like an internal debate within her mind about whether she should be doing this. I would imagine she might very well feel guilty after giving George a BJ in front of a glass window? Just trying to introduce more sexual tension. :)