Gary's Stories Overview

[bertrumm00057]

In this "sticky" meta-topic you will find information on Gary's story universe, the main characters, and more.

Here is the direct link to Gary's personal gallery:
Photos by Gary

[bertrumm00057]

Is this for future use? Because there's nothing here.

[bertrumm00057]

Yes, it is for Gary to post his overview and story characters information (which comprises the sample photos which were previously in the old gallery in his personal album).
Orflash64, I think we should remove our posts in this topic eventually, because it is dedicated to Gary.

[bertrumm00057]

Thank you
I have made two sub-albums in the Community Album, waiting for your OK. Trying to figure out if I can rename photos.

[bertrumm00057]

You may not rename them but rename them in the comments. It's what i do.

[bertrumm00057]

Gary,
Thanks for uploading your photos. I have tried to clean up the sub-albums in the Community album.
Your photos should go to the new sub-album "Photos by Gary".
Please do not add photos to the album "Photos by Survivor29", unless you are that person.
Your sub-albums "Claire" and "Heartland" look okay to me. You should be able to Edit image properties. This is a powerful instrument, you can move and rename images. If you cannot see the Edit button, we must inform Jaws.
Enjoy the new gallery

[bertrumm00057]

2 ways to name photos:
"Set Photo Properties" on upload page

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Edit bar after upload:

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Please note the bar will only be visible when viewing the photos you have uploaded yourself.

[bertrumm00057]

Thank you, Jaws. This is the Edit button which I referred to.

[bertrumm00057]

My Photo Gallery is open for viewing and I'd like to thank automagix12 for his help with getting it all sorted out. The Heartland Album shows the actresses from the show and who they play so you know what the characters look like. There is also a couple pictures of a newscaster named Robin Gill, who in my story is a Manager at HCI.
Decided to start another story. This is a Claire story and follows Claire after the death of Mr. Edwards. I never liked the end of the story, it just kind of trails off with no real ending. So I'm making another story that will fill in what happens right after the death of Mr. Edwards. Just a few paragraphs so far but I do have an idea of where its going.
Getting close to finishing the next chapter of Heartland. The chapter has dramatically changed in that the original had no sex and now its a porn movie (OK not quite). But now I might have to write another chapter to deal with the fallout from that chapter.
Have a great weekend

[bertrumm00057]

Gary, you are welcome.

For all interested readers, here is the direct link to Gary's personal gallery (I will also add this to the introduction posting in this topic):
Photos by Gary

[bertrumm00057]

Literotica can be very strange. I submitted my story "Mr. Edwards" for publication. Now I expected it to be rejected but not for this reason. They said: "Do you have appropriately sized paragraphs?". What the F*** is that supposed to mean? It asks a question, it doesn't say whats wrong. Are the paragraphs too big, to small? They are in fact all different sizes. Starting to think they couldn't find a reason to reject it so they came up with a wishy washy reason.

[Freight_Train]

<snip>They said: "Do you have appropriately sized paragraphs?"...

If you had replied with 'Yes', I wonder what would have happened

[bertrumm00057]

Literotica can be very strange. I submitted my story "Mr. Edwards" for publication. Now I expected it to be rejected but not for this reason. They said: "Do you have appropriately sized paragraphs?". What the F*** is that supposed to mean? It asks a question, it doesn't say whats wrong. Are the paragraphs too big, to small? They are in fact all different sizes. Starting to think they couldn't find a reason to reject it so they came up with a wishy washy reason.

I'm right there with you, gary. I once got rejected for incorrect punctuation. Just that, no specifics, no guidance on what they wanted, nothing. So I waited a few days and resubmitted, and it was published. ¯\_(ツ)_/¯

[bertrumm00057]

I've been hit with the punctuation thing several times. I think there is someone who is a fanatic about it. Have had to go over stories with a fine tooth comb to get it published. Then it annoys me when I read in comments of other stories complaining about poor punctuation.

[bertrumm00057]

Nothing new on the horizon?

[bertrumm00057]

Well I've been slightly stuck near the end of Chapter 5 of the Heartland story. But also have been too busy to properly write. The week of slavery for Amy is close to ending and she has been backsliding. Her sister/owner Lou has been treating her as a slave, thinking it will drive her away from slavery, and now doesn't know what to do next, wondering if Amy is now just a slave.
Lou is a self assured woman who doesn't like to think she has done anything wrong. She loves her sister but there is some anger underlying her actions because of what happened at HCI in the previous chapter when Amy, under the influence of the clit piercing, tries to help enslaving her sister.
Now what going to happen is that Lou will make some kind of mistake that will cause her grandfather Jack to intervene. He will also come up with the solution to "curing" Amy. I am just not sure what Lou will do that causes Jacks intervention. The best I can come up with is she wants to send Amy for slave training. Its near the end of the chapter so its can't be too drastic or long lasting, no more than a couple of pages. As usual I don't mind suggestions, and although I might not use a particular one, they might give me ideas.
In the meantime I have done some work on a unfinished Claire story. Its a "what if" story about a return to her previous black temporary owners, the Davis's, from my "Home Again" story (on Literotica). There is a slave party and she is traded to a BBC pimp.

[bertrumm00057]

BBC pimp?

[bertrumm00057]

Also could you post the original Mr. Edwards? Seem to have lost it somewhere.

[bertrumm00057]

BBC = Big Black Cock

[bertrumm00057]

Mr. Edwards Part One:
viewtopic.php?f=18&t=126

Mr. Edwards Part Two:
viewtopic.php?f=18&t=127

[dtrelsky]

Gary,
Glad to hear that you are continuing the story. I hope you get through your rough patch soon.

As an idea for what Lou does wrong: We know that the Grandfather is very anti-slavery, so what if he catches Lou treating Amy as a slave? I think his reaction would be along the lines of "Not in my house!" I think he would chew Lou out for treating her sister like this and take Amy in hand and work to get her back to normal.

Now the question would be what is normal for Amy at this point? Maybe she reverts to what her Grandfather expects, but she's definitely been changed by her experiences.

[bertrumm00057]

I think, though I don't say, that Lou convinced her grandfather Jack that treating Amy as a slave was the best way to "cure" her. Lou is very certain of herself and doesn't back down easily. As for Amy being cured, its going to work and she is going to try to be normal, but her slave mind going to be in the background waiting for a chance to re-emerge. And it will in the next two chapters, A completed one with Dr. Emily Ranger and Pony Play, which will have to re-written as it was finished before the Slave Amy story was thought of. And the last chapter (maybe) was originally going to be the Amy's first complete slave experience but that will have to be re-written as well.

[bertrumm00057]

What I meant was, I have the new version saved, but not the original version where Mr. Edward dies and Claire and her sister are free finally. It was saved on my last computer tablet that died. When I reboot from the cloud it saves everything except the word documents. They are lost forever and I have to go back and re-download everything again. Some places don't exist anymore, like the Yahoo groups.

[bertrumm00057]

That does have his Mr. Edwards death, its before the Alternate Version. Actually I have never liked the ending, its suggests so much but then passes over it. I'd probably just remove the last paragraph and end the story with his death, as I did a start on another story "After Mr. Edwards" which would expand on Slave Sally's move to worm her way into Claire's family and push Claire and her sister into slavery.

[bertrumm00057]

How about that idea I suggested? Mr. Edwards has an estranged son living in America, down in Dallas Texas. He comes to settle his dad's estate and Slave Sally tells him about Claire and Amanda and how his dad owned all three of them. He has customs officers put them on a plane to Texas to sort it out in a Texas court of law.