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New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2021 1:24 pm
by imreadonly2
I'm in the process of rewriting the epilogue to Sandy Foot Girl, for the final chapter of this story on Literotica. I published most of this already on this forum, but I've written some more backstory, which I thought you might enjoy. I'm including enough of the original to set the scene.

As you may recall, our heroine has returned to The Big D dressed as Sarah Hollister, slave consultant in charge, to retrieve a copy of The Sandy Foot Girl magazine. To her horror and embarrassment, she discovers that she is on the cover. A police officer with the magazine in his back pocket spots her, and the fun begins.
I was wearing one of my worsted wool business skirts, but the day before I had instructed my tailor to tighten it, to flatter my figure. The tailor had gone a bit too far, and it hugged my ass so tightly I was afraid that if I bent over my brand would show through the tight fabric. It wasn’t a comfortable skirt, but my ass looked amazing in it, so I had worn it anyway.

My hands were trembling too badly to put on makeup, so I mostly just stared at him, struggling to breathe, trying not to show my panic. My officer-in-charge could see the fear in nervousness in my eyes, but I couldn’t see his. His hands weren’t trembling, and he looked calm and collected. This wasn’t some teenage stroker, this was an officer trained to hunt down escaped slave girls. He was good at it, too: damn good, and had the fruit salad to prove it. Worse, he was carrying my image in his back pocket. I wasn’t escaped, of course, even if I was a slave girl, at least technically. I mean, it was all a misunderstanding.

It is said that a trained slave cop can spot a slave girl from the way she talks, the way she walks, the way she laughs or parts her hair. It becomes a sixth sense. Now the hunky slave hunter was staring at my ass. Could he see through my clothes, and see the humiliating butt brand that marked me as a Sandy Foot Girl, sold by The Big D? Did my tortured gait identify me as a newly “badged” girl?

A part of me wanted to circle around to the Slave Mall entrance, and get a wig, and some sunglasses, and maybe a nice floppy hat. My clothes were entirely different, so with my face covered there would be no way anyone could recognize me. But then I heard another voice in my head, a strange voice, calm and soothing, that addressed me in the 3rd person.

“No, that wouldn’t be fair, Sarah. After all, he is the police, and you are a registered Pleasure Slut. It’s only fair that you let him have a good look at you. He is the law, after all. Of course, if he realizes your Miss Sandy Foot, he’ll use that big fist of his to grab you by the scruff of the neck, strip you down to your birthday suit, and put your sweet little pussy back on the auction block where it belongs.”

“Maybe Jake will let him fuck you, before they sell you again, as a reward. You’ll be one of the little “cop” perks of the job, like free coffee and doughnuts. He will take you in hand, and be strong and powerful, and you will cry in ecstasy as he fucks you. You’ll go back on the block with his spluge leaking out of your pussy, and everyone will see what a whore you are.”

“If you get sold again, no one will bother to save you. You’ll be 1/50th of one of the next decorations on his shirt, and you’ll be a slave girl again, fucked and sold.”

Struggling to steady myself, I put my hand on the mirror to keep from falling. Overcome with heat, I took off my blazer jacket. My back felt wet. Turning, I can see the back of my blouse was soaked with sweat, leaving it clinging to my skin.

Although I always wear a brassiere to work, for some reason that day I had chosen to go to work sans underwear. After all, my jacket would cover my breasts, and my skirt would cover my pussy.

After my experience of a few weeks ago, I often went around my apartment completely nude, even when the drapes were open. Clothing seemed strangely restrictive. But now, sweating like a hog, the braless look was not my friend. My nipples were hard, and the material of my silk blouse was clinging to my breasts like I was in a wet T-Shirt contest.

Even through his mirrored glasses, his gaze was penetrating. I was relieved when one of his brother officers asked him when the next auction was. Glancing at the clock on the wall he said simply, “Ten minutes to hammer time.”

Hammer time! The sound of his deep, authoritative, masculine voice, and the phrase, “hammer time”, triggered an immediate and vivid PSTD flashback. Suddenly I realized why the officer with the mirrored green eyes looked so familiar.

It had happened on the day I was sold. The entrance to the chute leading to the auction block was crowded, and I had to wait for the clerk to scan in the barcoded tag on my ear. Jasmine had unhooked leash and walked over to talk to another employee about her plans for the weekend.

I was relieved to be free of the humiliating dog leash, although “free” was a relative term. I was naked in a slave market, along with dozens of other girls, waiting to be stuffed into a cattle chute like an animal being led to slaughter. Still my mind told me this couldn’t be happening, that it was all a dreadful mistake, a silly misunderstanding, and that someone would save me.

The professional term for this is “slave stupid”, or “bimbo brain”. Yes, it was idiotic, but I once wrote that if you lineup 100 naked girls in front of the auction block, 99 of them will think that they are going to be rescued.

It was then that I saw him. A police officer, strong, powerful, and muscular. He was chatting up one of the female wranglers, a cute college girl who was probably earning her slaving degree. He wasn’t even looking at the naked slave girls awaiting their turn on the block. We weren’t there to be flirted with and seduced. We were there to be sold and fucked.

He was a formidable, dominating presence, with his golden badge glimmering under the cool, industrial light. I had replaced the old-fashioned florescent tubes with more energy efficient, high bay LED lights. It was modern, and gave off more light, but I kept the long, linear shape of the old lightening fixtures, as I felt that it was important to the aesthetic for The Big D to have that rustic, cattle yard feel.

It pleased me to see the lighting I had designed glistening off his golden star badge, but as I was about to be auctioned off, and become a naked slave girl for real, I had more pressing matters to attend to.

All my life, police officers had protected me and helped me. The armed guards at the various properties I owned, were, like the centurion I was looking at now, often off duty cops. But they understood they worked for me, and acted accordingly. Even police officers not on my payroll always treated me with respect, particularly when I informed them of who I was, and who my friends were. People with my sort of power didn’t get speeding tickets. The laws are for the little people.

Was it slave stupid to ask him for help? Perhaps. But I was desperate, and so I decided to plead my case to the powerful muscle man with the badge and the gun and the mirrored green eyes.

I came up to one side, spread my legs, and put my hands on top of my head, the very picture of submission. It was a humiliating pose, but one that was expected when a slave girl addressed a free person, particularly a man in authority.

“Excuse me, officer?” I said meekly. “There’s been a dreadful mix-up. I’m not actually a slave girl. I don’t belong here. This is all a terrible, awful mistake! If you could… let me make a phone call, we can get this all straightened out.”

He and the female slave wrangler stared at me, clearly shocked that I had the temerity to interrupt their flirtation.

He cocked his head sideways, like a puzzled dog, then turned to face me squarely. I felt my pulse quicken as his mirrored eyes slowly perused my nakedness.

The term “slave naked” is used to describe a state of nudity and humiliation that extends far beyond the mere absence of clothes. I was naked, with my legs spread, and my hands on top of my head, my fingers tangled in my loosely flowing hair. In contrast, the man coolly appraising my nakedness was wearing shiny leather boots, pressed blue pants with a gold stripe down the leg, and a dark blue, starched shirt festooned with epaulets, badges, and fruit salad marking his many accomplishments.

He was muscular, with biceps like tree trunks, and was so tall that I had to look up at him to see his gold star badge. His belt contained the tools of his job, and everything he could possibly need to subdue a slave girl. He had a radio, handcuffs, a taser, pepper spray, a baton, extra ammunition for his gun, and of course, his .357 sidearm. I also noticed he had a Big D remote, which, with the press of a button, would shock any slave girl in its range into submission.

In contrast, I had nothing. Even the shock collar and the humiliating blue cattle tag dangling from my ear were the property of The Big D. Standing literally in his shadow, I trembled in the wake of his physical strength, weapons, and aura of command.

The irony was rich. In a way, he worked for me, and if I had been there with Jake, he would have obsequious and eager to please. I might have sent him on an errand, to fetch me some coffee. But I wasn’t wearing my Gucci suit today. As I strained to draw in oxygen in short bursts, I stood before him, stripped of everything, nothing but a pair of tits and a hot, wet pussy.

I couldn’t see his eyes, but with a tilt of his head, I saw him looking down at my bare feet, where my little toes were scrunched up, attempting to dig some warmth out of the freezing cold cement.

Oh, how I wish I had shoes! It is an old slaver’s adage that a girl never realizes how much power shoes give her, until they are taken away.

As he tilted his head up, his mirrored gaze ran slowly up my trembling legs, stopping to rest on my closely shaven slave slash, with my lips and clit fully visible. I had been left just enough hair to prove I was a natural blonde. That would increase my profit-per-pussy number, but it was my dripping, clearly visible juices that would really drive up my block price.

My shameful wetness wasn’t my fault! I had been rubbing myself, hard, but I had to get my pussy block ready. But my macho cop didn’t care about the unfairness of my predicament. All he saw was golden slave pussy, hot, wet, and ready to be sold.

Oh, how I wanted to cover myself! But I didn’t dare. Pleasure sluts were not permitted modesty, or any sort of dignity. I remained frozen in place, my feet glued to the floor, my hands bound together as securely as if they were in iron cuffs. I literally could not move, the power of his badge, his gun, and his commanding presence having simply overwhelmed me.

I felt a new rush of fear as he took two steps closer, totally engulfing me in his gigantic shadow. He took a deep breath, and I realized that, like any good hunting dog, the slave hound was picking up my scent.

I felt ashamed by his casual enjoyment of my slave stink, but his eyes continued upward, over my flat tummy, over my round breasts and pointy nipples, which were bouncing slightly as I struggled to breathe.

Finally, at long last, his cold, merciless green lenses rested on my desperate, pleading eyes.

Roughly grabbing the shameful blue cattle tag stapled painfully through my ear, he jerked my head closer and turned it to read my lot. “B-169” he muttered, reducing me to my number.

Looking up at the industrial wall clock, above the cattle chute leading to the auction block, he chuckled.

“It’s nearly HAMMER time, my little slave girl” he teased.

The slave wrangler he was flirting with laughed, as I dug my little bare toes into the concrete floor. Little college bitch! I hoped that someday she would end up in a collar.

Hooking his finger into his gun belt, he regarded me coolly. “You said you needed to make a phone call. Where’s your cell phone?”

“I’m not sure, Officer,” I said. “They took it.”

“Did they now? Maybe you just lost it. Here, let me check.”

I didn’t resist as he reached between my legs and slipped two fingers inside of me. He was taller than me, and using his hand he lifted me up onto my toes, so my pussy was dancing on his hand, and I was jerking like a puppet on a string.

The coed slave wrangler he had been flirting with moved to the side, to get a better view. She reminded me of the many interns I had schooled in the slaving arts. Young and naïve, I was tough on them, and paid them a pittance, for their own good, of course. Now I looked to her, silently pleading for help.

“Get your fingers way up there,” she said, laughing. “You know what thieves slave girls are.” Bitch!

I gasped as he thrust his fingers deep into me, and began rubbing the walls of my pussy in a classic contraband check.

“Why did they take away your phone, juicy-fruit?” he asked, grinning down at me as he jerked me up and down on his fist.

“Because slave girls don’t have phones, Mas… Master!” I admitted, gasping with pleasure on his hand.

I groaned in frustration as he withdrew his fingers from me. “That’s right, Pleasure Slut,” he said.

Jerking me around by the ear tag he swatted me on my bare ass.

“Slave girls (SPANK!) Don’t ask FREE PEOPLE (spank) to make phone calls for them (SPANK, SPANK, SPANK!)

Laughing, he spanked me back in line with the other slave pussy, and a few seconds later I was BEEPED into the system and stuffed into the cattle chute, pressed tightly between two other naked sluts and left to rub my wet pussy in preparation for my one-way trip to the auction block.

Now, the rent-a-cop who so had so cruelly abused me was looking at me again, eyeing my breasts through my wet silk blouse, and ogling my ass. My eyes narrowed into two tight slits as I felt overwhelmed by a sudden desire to seek my vengeance upon him.

In an instant, my view of him transformed. When I had been a naked slave girl, he had seemed like an untouchable God. Now I saw him for what he truly was, a blue-collar bully, and a miserable little jobsworth who had got his rocks off on abusing helpless girls under his authority.

“Hammer time”, indeed. I would drop the hammer on him, all right. When I was naked, collared, and tagged, he was a tough guy with a badge. Now I was Dr. Sarah Hollister, in charge and in control, and I would make the little clock puncher pay for how he had treated me.

It would have to be done carefully, though. The shameful and incriminating magazine with the disgusting photo of me was in his possession, and he was already looking me up-and-down. He literally had the power to enslave me in his back pocket, and if I wasn’t careful, I might quickly go from in-charge to inventory. But the whiff of danger of it only made my revenge all the more exciting. Yes, this was definitely going to be fun!

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2021 1:50 pm
by Carl Bradford
I enjoy almost every bit of the Sarah saga that you give us. I'm glad to see you are cleaning up the ending, since there's so much I wish I knew about what happened to her between being branded and reappearing, clothed and apparently free--I think in one story line her teaching assistant located her and got her freed, only for an ungrateful Sarah to punish him, which means he's unlikely to save her after this encounter.
In my own writing, I sometimes introduce a character solely for a particular scene and then readers ask what happened to him/her afterwards. Let me be guilty of the same offense--do you have any idea of what happened to the British reporter who appeared in the early portions of Sandy Foot Girl? The last image I have of her was that she was stripped naked because Sarah had thrown water at her--at which point the reporter became almost indistinguishable from the rest of the inventory, begging for towels and clothes. I keep hoping she was sold in a manner that cancelled all her assumed superiority over Sarah!

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2021 2:30 pm
by jeepster
Awesome! Now you have my interest about what Sarah will do to get back at the policeman!

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Wed Sep 08, 2021 11:17 pm
by imreadonly2
Carl Bradford wrote: Wed Sep 08, 2021 1:50 pm In my own writing, I sometimes introduce a character solely for a particular scene and then readers ask what happened to him/her afterwards. Let me be guilty of the same offense--do you have any idea of what happened to the British reporter who appeared in the early portions of Sandy Foot Girl? The last image I have of her was that she was stripped naked because Sarah had thrown water at her--at which point the reporter became almost indistinguishable from the rest of the inventory, begging for towels and clothes. I keep hoping she was sold in a manner that cancelled all her assumed superiority over Sarah!
Goodness yes, sometimes a word or a phrase in one of your stories will cause me to spin an entire tale in my head. I think you had a throw away paragraph about a bored night manager that drove me to distraction for weeks.

The British reporter was actually based on someone I was chatting with, who built up that character. We actually did a super long chat over several weeks involving The Slave Mall attached to The Big D, which I pictured as sort of a high end Rodeo Drive that offers services to women who want to play slave but don't want to shop in the more industrial Big D. It would offer you the chance to include yourself in an oil painting as a slave girl, for example. The food court would contain the normal choices of Panda Express & Sbarro, but it would also include slave kibble in a bowl, orange slime, and the chance to eat out of a trough. There's a whole lot of world building there, but I haven't gotten around to putting it in a story yet.

I pictured the English reporter as being sold off, and Sarah coming back to taunt her, although eventually she escapes. All of my stories are an endless cycle of revenge melodramas, with heroines escaping and seeking revenge only to be (gasp!) recaptured at a later date.

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Thu Sep 09, 2021 5:41 am
by imreadonly2
I found the passage in your story TRYING ON A COLLAR CHAPTER 3 that totally drove me to distraction for weeks.
The clock said it was past 6:30 that evening. After about 5 minutes, I heard several people approaching; Jessie and the day shift manager walked in. Virtually ignoring me, they walked over to the desk. Jessie logged onto the computer and the two discussed on-going cases, apparently transferring responsibility as Jessie took over for the night. Then Jessie gestured at me and remarked,

"I'm switching collars on this one."

The other guy gave me a measured look, and replied, "I can see why, but do you have documentation to collar her? Did the boss approve?"

"No—we're not enslaving her, just putting her in a real collar for the night, to give her a thrill." He flashed me a smile. "I just want you to know about it as a backup—if you come in tomorrow and she's on the list for sale, you know to put a hold onto it, OK?"

"All right—it's your business. I've heard of female wranglers pretending to be slave sluts overnight, but not to have a manager do it to the temporary inventory. If we're done, I'm 40 minutes overdue to leave." He nodded, looked one more time at my exposed form, and walked out, closing the door.
I LOVED the image of the bored manager barely paying attention to the sexy piece of ass playing slave girl, and the casual, jobsworth bureaucratic attitude of "Whatever, as long as it's no skin off my nose." One can easily see how THAT would go south, if the auditors arrived, or an insistent, premium buyer or his boss pressed him to put her on the block. Great stuff! It's wonderful how reading other people's work inspires you, isn't it?

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Thu Sep 09, 2021 1:28 pm
by Carl Bradford
Joe was kind enough to mention my throw-away about the bored, indifferent dayshift manager at the Longhorn. Joe's previous comments had prompted me to include this guy as a cameo in other stories, just because Joe was intrigued. In "Through the Side Door, Pt. 01" for example, Willow has persuaded her friend to pretend to be a slave for her:
"Fortunately, we had just made it back out onto the processing floor before the day shift manager, a lazy pain-in-the butt named Harold, stopped me.
“What’ve you got there, Willow?” He asked in a very tired, disinterested way.
I tried to bluff him, “Just some asshole being kenneled for the night.”
His eyebrow shot up. “Really? There’s no 4559 on my schedule for kenneling.” 4559 was the number on the training collar I had put Jack in. I thought sure we were busted, and Jack looked terrified, but as usual Harold took the path of least resistance. “You’re not trying to trick some guy into slavery, are you? No? Carry on, then, but make sure you straighten out his billing. I don’t want any trouble, got it?” And he waved us on."

That said, I didn't really have enough to write a story about Harold himself--how can you write an erotic story about a guy who is just phoning it in when he's surrounded by naked slaves?

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Thu Sep 09, 2021 1:30 pm
by dtrelsky
The Slave Mall is suddenly very interesting to me. I think I'd written it off as a place you went to buy accessories, basically just a bunch of sex toys. This though...wow. It sounds really hot! I really hope we get to read about it one day. Even if you don't get around to writing a story in there the world building alone would be something I'd find interesting.
Of course I also look forward to more from Sarah and Annie...so many stories but its never enough, I always want more!

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2021 2:17 am
by imreadonly2
A few of the stores in the mall

Objet D'Art: An art shop where a young woman can have a full body scan or perhaps a fully body cast done, to produce a perfect bronze or marble image of themselves in slave girl mode.

https://images1.bonhams.com/image?src=I ... osizefit=1

They could also have themselves painted into a Slave Market scene, from Rome, or the Barbary Pirates. This is particular favorite for moms / adult daughters to give to their husbands, for display in their mansions.

https://www.1st-art-gallery.com/frame-p ... b=0&huge=1

Slave Baubles: A wide variety of custom jewelry, but with an elegant twist. For example, a row of cheap slave beads that can be converted into a priceless diamond necklace, or 14K gold slave sandals painted to look like cheap slave beads. Time-lock silver key cases where a chastity or collar key won't be released for a certain amount of time. Wedding rings with Slave Identification Numbers carved into the diamond. "The possibilities are limitless, as are the prices."

Slave-o-Ween: Costume Shop to allow your slave girl to fulfill your every fantasy, or your wife to fulfill her fantasy of being a slave girl. In addition to getting that nurse, doctor, cheerleader, gladiator, or harem girl costume, your slave/significant other can also receive training in how to play their parts more realistically, and make your fantasy a reality.

Slave Void: Your virtual reality headset will allow you to become a slave buyer or chattel at a slave market in the Old South, Ancient Rome, or on the Barbary Cost.

Private Prime: Customized, private, and personalized training and grading.

My Little Pony: Crops, Bridles, Tacks, as well as hi speed cameras, computerized analysis and other training equipment to help you turn your looker into a winner.

Custom Curiosities: Customized branding heads, Spanish horses, pillories, or bondage gear made to order. Slave whips of all lengths and varieties, with the family crest on a silver or gold handle are a speciality. With enslavement papers and a trip to Custom Curiosities, you can actually make your troublesome ex's gonads into earrings and his sack into a coin purse.

Antebellum Antiques: Antiques from slave holding societies from the beginning of time. Even if you can't afford an auction block from Ancient Rome, you might be able to buy a shackle from a Tripoli slave market.

As with any mall, there are a lot people there simply to browse and gawk, or enjoy the food court or the general ambience.

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Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2021 3:29 am
by jeepster
A great place to take your wife or girlfriend!

Re: New Joe Doe Story Fragment from Sandy Foot Girl Epilogue

Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2021 4:57 am
by imreadonly2
Carl Bradford wrote: Thu Sep 09, 2021 1:28 pm That said, I didn't really have enough to write a story about Harold himself--how can you write an erotic story about a guy who is just phoning it in when he's surrounded by naked slaves?
A story is only as good as its villain.

"How long until the power comes back up?" Harold asked. "I mean, fully restored, so we can restart the computer systems?"

"The power company blew a transformer. They said it's going to be at least 24 hours. Jake's going to be pissed that we're losing a full day of sales."

"Not necessarily. Didn't that sheik buy all the girls at the Any Chance? Auction?" Harold asked.

"Yeah, he just ran the table. Paid 5 times what they're worth. Money don't matter to him, I guess. But it doesn't matter how much money we DIDN'T make, as those were all sorority girls doing their initiation. It's not like any of them are going to get really sold."

"They're sold all ready. What they're not going to get is unsold, because the computer system isn't up to receive any texts or respond to any automated messages to rescind their sales."

"What are you suggesting?" the clerk said, horrified. "You're not saying we should..."

"What I'm saying is the laws on our side, and we aren't responsible for acts of God. We got 75 head of Prime pussy to brand, shackle together and load onto a truck to the airport. They should fit in the cargo hold of his jet, if you jam 'em in tits-to-toes. With any luck, they'll be dancing in the harem before mommy & daddy even realize they're gone. I get my commission, Jake's happy, and I get to go home early," Harold said, yawning as he glanced at his watch. "Blessed be the ways of the Lord!" he added, his voice dripping sarcasm.